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Wednesday, January 10, 2018

FF: Is it you or me

PC: Victor and Sarah Potter
I am in a tiny house, in a village where no one knows me, miles away from my past and away from an abusive husband. I am sitting here on a cold night with a cup of hot chocolate and staring at the neatly made cobweb.

I wonder, is that spider scared? 
Why has it made so many layers around it? 
How far has it traveled to settle here? 
Has it been used and beaten? 
Does it feel lonely? 
Will it ever find love? 
Will it ever be happy?

Suddenly, tears cloud my eyes while I think, Is it is spider or is it me that I am thinking about?

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46 comments:

  1. AnonymousJanuary 10, 2018 at 2:40 PM

    Lovely flash showing the character's insight. Transference to the spider made her realise all her own issues. Well done.

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  2. AnonymousJanuary 10, 2018 at 2:49 PM

    That's clever and moving

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  3. Sandra CrookJanuary 10, 2018 at 4:13 PM

    A very graphic take on her situation. Nicely done.

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  4. Iain KellyJanuary 10, 2018 at 4:32 PM

    Sounds like the spider is better company than her husband.

    https://iainkellywriting.wordpress.com/2018/01/10/black-widow/

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    1. DeepaJanuary 11, 2018 at 10:04 AM

      I agree....better to be alone than beaten :-)
      Thanks fro dropping by Iain

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  5. Penny GaddJanuary 10, 2018 at 4:49 PM

    I like the way you use the spider's web as a metaphor for the difficulties of the narrator's life. You've written it neatly.

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  6. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsJanuary 10, 2018 at 4:57 PM

    Dear DeeDee,

    A sad piece. I like the way she relates her situation to the spider. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  7. LindaJanuary 10, 2018 at 7:37 PM

    I am glad she has taken the first step toward a better life. Leaving him was the smartest thing.

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    1. DeepaJanuary 11, 2018 at 10:13 AM

      I agree with you. Lets hope all goes well for her from now on.
      Thanks for dropping by Linda :-)

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  8. VaradJanuary 10, 2018 at 11:43 PM

    The spider and the lady should hang in there!

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    1. DeepaJanuary 11, 2018 at 10:14 AM

      Ahh i like the way you have put it.
      Thanks for dropping by varad :-0

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  9. Susie ClevengerJanuary 11, 2018 at 4:12 AM

    Heartbreaking... I sense in the story the speaker is referring to herself with those questions.

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    1. DeepaJanuary 11, 2018 at 10:15 AM

      Yeah, idle mind is a hard thing.
      Thanks for dropping by Susie :-)

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  10. Anurag BakhshiJanuary 11, 2018 at 9:41 AM

    The very fact that it can now even think these thoughts means that the tide is turning, and she will live again! Great story.

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    1. DeepaJanuary 11, 2018 at 10:16 AM

      I do hope that all good happens to her from now on
      Thanks for dropping by Anurag :-)

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  11. plaridelJanuary 11, 2018 at 12:11 PM

    if anything, she did something about it. that's a good start.

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    1. DeepaJanuary 15, 2018 at 12:21 PM

      Lets hope all happens good now
      Thanks for dropping by Plaridel :-)

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  12. dralimanJanuary 11, 2018 at 1:38 PM

    Thought provoking.

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  13. AnonymousJanuary 11, 2018 at 4:13 PM

    I feel for her. At least she is processing her feelings and doing some self-care. She'll get there :)

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    1. DeepaJanuary 15, 2018 at 12:27 PM

      We hope all good happens for her now :-)
      Thanks for dropping by JJ

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  14. Keith's RamblingsJanuary 11, 2018 at 4:26 PM

    Caught in a web. Excellent Mrs D.

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  15. AnonymousJanuary 11, 2018 at 5:39 PM

    Time to turn things around in her favour now I think. :)

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    1. DeepaJanuary 15, 2018 at 12:52 PM

      I do hope that
      Thanks for dropping by Pensitivity :-)

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  16. Joy PixleyJanuary 11, 2018 at 7:19 PM

    Nicely done: sometimes it is while pointing outward that we realize we are seeing something inside.

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  17. AnonymousJanuary 11, 2018 at 9:31 PM

    Nicely done Dee Dee. I like the way you have asked questions which is a mental reflection of the character's situation.
    So, far her company looks good, I guess. :)
    Thanks, Norma.

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  18. DaleJanuary 12, 2018 at 3:11 AM

    Nice take, DeeDee. I can so imagine she would have asked any critter lying about as she contemplated her own life.

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    1. DeepaJanuary 15, 2018 at 2:00 PM

      :-)
      I can imagine that too. Thanks for dropping by Dale :-)

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  19. Sascha DarlingtonJanuary 12, 2018 at 6:06 AM

    Well done. So sad.

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  20. UnknownJanuary 13, 2018 at 1:30 AM

    Lovely story, and very poignantly expressed.

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  21. brudbergJanuary 13, 2018 at 2:35 AM

    Sometimes its just easier to project your emotion on something else than yourself I think. Very nice writing.

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    1. DeepaJanuary 15, 2018 at 2:03 PM

      Oh I so agree with you Brudberg. Thanks for dropping by :-)

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  22. Raymond RoyJanuary 13, 2018 at 9:52 PM

    Oh the feeling of escape.. as a foster child, as a witness of abuse.. nothing in this world is sweeter than the moment of feeling safe.. even in a web filled room. Really tuggged at heart strings. Peace to you

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  23. DahliaJanuary 14, 2018 at 9:08 PM

    I like this piece very much

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  24. MikeJanuary 16, 2018 at 9:56 PM

    I hope that there are many cups of hot chocolate to comfort her, and a better life to come. I enjoyed the way you related this story.

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